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he02060100

Hi.I am xxx.I am come from Hong Kong.I am proficient in economic and
BAFS.My hobby is reading.I think reading can helps me to solve my problems.I want to go to New Zealand because New Zealand have a good learning environment.
May learn many new things and broaden my horizons.I think in the New Zealand this unique learning environment,can make me in the study and the innovation ponder and so on various aspects can have progresses.I hope in an English environment study English.This can make my English proficiency to be progressive.Moreover I like New Zealand's natural scenery and the common social practice is simple.This is I wants to go to New Zealand's reason,thanks.

Mr.Rose

just have 1 point= =?

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Grammar Mistake

血色乂薔薇

Hi.I am xxx.I am come from Hong Kong.I am proficient in economics and
BAFS.My hobby is reading.I think reading can helps me to solve my problems.I want to go to New Zealand because New Zealand has a good learning environment.

Renne

YOU HAD MORE GRAMMAR MISTAKE,YOU NEED TO IMPROVE YOUR GRAMMAR~